Posted by Lin Lougheed on September 24, 19101 at 17:28:31:
In Reply to: In difficult situations, some people... posted by James on September 24, 19101 at 02:41:44:
Your essay makes its point completely. We understand how you act and why you act.
You do not have to change the organization, but I wonder if your essay would be richer if you took each of these qualities and discuss them using specific examples:
"...boldness, calmness and courage..."
Some other suggestions:
"that God always be with anyone "
"When I was young, maybe it was when I was 10-year-old, my house was totally burned by unknown fire with remaining nothing."
"When I was 10 or so, a fire of unknown origin totally destroyed my house. Nothing remained."
" that God will always be with anyone..."