Posted by Lin Lougheed on October 02, 19101 at 17:16:01:
In Reply to: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A students perpose in getting as education is to earn a lot of money posted by Priyadarshini Hegde on September 27, 19101 at 14:39:23:
I agree with Cindy. You need to take what you have written and revise it. You have many good ideas, but now organize it. What is the value of education?
In the first sentence, you should write: "A lot of people..." or "Many people..." The second sentence in the first paragraph is too long. You can make several short sentences from it.
Revise it and repost it, please.