Posted by Lin Lougheed on October 02, 19101 at 17:30:31:
In Reply to: If you could have ... posted by Yu Gin on September 25, 19101 at 03:53:50:
You took a very prosaic question and gave a very poetic answer. Congratulations.
I'm sure this kind of response would surprise the raters... pleasantly surprise them.
Your sentences are a bit long. I would rewrite this. Make the sentences shorter and more direct.
Focus on a few reasons you want to control Afghanistan and make your details support these reasons.