Posted by Lin Lougheed on October 26, 19101 at 18:16:52:
In Reply to: Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. posted by Jeab on October 26, 19101 at 13:13:07:
:You stated your opinion clearly, but did not specify the three general ideas that you were going to talk about.
In your second paragraph, you combined too many ideas. Revise this essay. Think how you will support your opinion and give specific details. Each paragraph should give one general idea with specific details supporting that idea.