Posted by Lin Lougheed on January 18, 19102 at 16:57:32:
In Reply to: You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which posted by Silvyd on January 15, 19102 at 12:24:52:
Thank you for your inspiring essay. You make me want to visit Russia again.
Your first paragraph is full of sentence fragments. Be careful. Written English is not like spoken. We need complete sentences: subjects and verbs.
Your last paragraph is very well written. Your parallel structure reads beautifully.