Posted by Michele Peters on April 26, 19102 at 13:37:56:
In Reply to: parents should plan their children's time carefully posted by Jacky Liang on April 22, 19102 at 11:29:32:
Well done!
Some comments:
children are ignorant to plan...
children do not know how to plan...
If the children are left alone to do whatever they like, they may use their time unwisely and spend most of their time playing games, watching TV or sleeping, neglecting all other important activities, such as studying, exercising, etc.
Run-on sentence. Make two sentences.
imbalance
unbalanced
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