Posted by Michele Peters on April 28, 19102 at 18:26:07:
In Reply to: Topic-80 posted by Sue on April 04, 19102 at 20:24:16:
Good job.
Some comments:
Put a space between each paragraph Each reason with supporting details should be its own paragraph.
You do not need to include the question in your essay but should give a topic sentence.
For example: While some people think that the artists' contribution to society is more valuable, I think the scientists' contribution is more important.
Your conclusion should restate your reasons for your opinon.
For example, Contributions made by scientists have made life easier, chores faster, and improved our quality of life.
"On the other hand" is used to make comparison. Use another transition, like in addition or futhermore.
singers and dancers entertain
painters and writers show