Posted by Michele Peters on May 12, 19102 at 09:49:24:
In Reply to: should government spend money on developing technology and using computer or should be spend on more basic needs posted by lixiaofan on May 07, 19102 at 06:13:43:
Good start. To make the essay more clear add a space between and indent each paragraph/reason. You're more important reason should be first.
Make sure to capatilize "I".
: There is a public debate today that someone think that governments should spend money on developing technology.
: Others ,however,think that the money should be spend on more basic needs.As far as i am concerned,i prefer the former.
Restate your position instead of saying "the former". For example: I believe the government should spend money on developing technology and using computers.
: It firstly comes to the fact that there is a famous proverb"Technologe is productivity".
First, as the famous proverb says, "Technology is productivity".
Also,it is well know that we can make many new products using in many fields by improving technology.
...well known.....products used in
There are many things unknow.Developing can lead us to
...many things unknown. Developing technology can
To some extend,some data which cann't handle by hand,ok,turn it to computer,it will do
This sentence is confusing. To some extent, (not sure what you are saying. Is it that computers can handle enormous amount of data?)
Restate your reasons in the conclusion and be sure to proofread your essay.