Posted by Michele Peters on May 12, 19102 at 09:59:45:
In Reply to: agree or disagree with " when people succeed, it is because of hard work, luck has nothing to do with success" posted by jakrat on May 07, 19102 at 14:57:52:
Your essay is well organized but could be clearer.
Restate your opinion in the first paragraph: I strongly agree that working hard leads to success.
Some other comments:
: To be success needs a variety of factors such as the effort people devote to their work,the faithfulness in their jobs, and the supporting from their colleaques and families.
For someone to be successful, he or she needs to be devoted to work, have faith in the job, and support from his/her colleagues.
Although someone believe that one of Although some believe
Remember to proofread your essay.