Posted by Michele Peters on June 16, 19102 at 13:29:51:
In Reply to: 10 posted by Hiro on June 10, 19102 at 09:44:36:
Good start. You give three good general statements and supporting details. You should restate your three reasons in your conclusion.
Some other comments:
I personally think that hard work of them can really leads to success.
...hard work can really lead to success.
can provide clear solutions more than
clearer solutions than can luck.
studying more hardly. But if we do not
studying harder.
If you work hardly, people who
work hard,
colleagues helped me when I work hardly
work hard