Comments:
: : Your point seems to be that children can learn easily when they are young if it is fun. That is your thesis. Now expand with three general statements: motivation, learning potential, ability to learn quickly. You have the specific details already in your essay. You need to organize them. : : The essay reads very easily. However, you should reread your essay for these and other errors. : : "Several studies showed that kids at" : : "Several studies have shown that children from..." : : : : Especially young people are : : "Young people especially are..." : : : : Children at this stage learn especially languages very fast : : "Children at this stage especially learn languages very fast.." : : : Nowadays education plays a very important role in our : : : society. Especially young people are encouraged to learn as much as : : : they can. I think that it is never too early for a good education but : : : it ought to be non-formal. : : : Several studies showed that kids at the age of four to six have : : : a high learning potential and this potential should be used to their : : : advantage. Children at this stage learn especially languages very fast : : : and should therefore e.g. spend holiday in a foreign country. There : : : they would learn the language very easily and fast. Based on these : : : abilities it would be very easy to encourage the child to learn this : : : language at home in a more formal way. : : : My view of a formal education is a child in a school uniform sitting : : : on a desk in the classroom and try to learn something about the greek : : : history and that does not fit to the interests of a child; it is just : : : boring and the child will lose the interest on these topics and : : : other issues. And this can not be the proper way. : : : To my opinion the motivation of a child to learn something is very : : : important for the future development. Therefore i would show the child : : : that learning can and should be fun. I would play games like memory, : : : scrabble or trivial pursuit. Through this games the child would learn : : : something and has fun as well. : : : The child would learn something through this soft and native education : : : and has therefore a small advantage at school. Through this : : : benefit school would not be a big threat at the beginning and : : : therefore the child would have more fun in school as well.