Posted by Naluwan on July 14, 19102 at 10:28:56:
In Reply to: Give me your advice. Thanks. posted by To Thuy Linh on July 13, 19102 at 10:15:59:
Your essay is really a nice one. Here, I have some suggestions on your essay!The topic wants you to express "your" thoughts about this issue. So, in your article you should use "I" or "we" to express your point of view rather than using "you" all the time. Thanks!
Naluwan