Posted by fly_shelley on July 24, 19102 at 04:12:23:
In Reply to: Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. posted by To Thuy Linh on July 23, 19102 at 07:36:29:
the general structure is ok.and you will not even forget to make a conclusion at some ends of paragraph.
but if you can demostrate more concisely and more close, it will be much better. try to exercise how to demostrate a question concisely and substitute some sentenses with just one or cut off.