I think your essay is much academic ,at which point I like . And the synthetic also reach the enough level of the variety. I don't know how long has this eaasy take in writting, cause we have timelimit in the real test, you know?! Anyway I should learn from you. Some mistakes: It is not 'It's' countryside, away,poor education or low rate of educational people. The result of your thesis , I like the best of all.

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Posted by Chang on September 02, 19102 at 09:54:55:

In Reply to: Some people think human activity is damaging the earth, some feel it's human activity make the earth a better place to live. What'syour opinion posted by Smiling sun on August 19, 19102 at 18:07:10:

: Hi all !

: Highly appreciate your comments for my first essay posted. Is it persuasive, sufficient and logical ?. Which mark may it be given ? Thank you.

: In the last decades, natural disasters happen more often in countries over the world. It’s human activites that cause the earth to be seriously damaged like that.

: The rapid and extensive development in the industiralised countries has discharged with an increasing aniount of pollution. Smoke from factory, dust from construction works, dust from vehicles on the roads make our living enviroment seriously polluted. In some large cities, people have to buy oxygen to breath as there is not enough fresh air for them to breathe. Some people even have to run awy from the urban to live in the country side. The polluted air is alarming us the possibility of damage in our ozon layer, a protection layer from halfmful ultra-violet ray.

: Unlike the case of industrialised countries, people in developing countries is damaging the earth in other ways. Because of low education, people expoilt natural resouces excessively without any activity of creation. In many countries, thousands of hectas of forest have been destroyed for a short period of time. The exploitation of resources has resulted in the ecological imbalance. Natural disaters such as floods, droughts and storms are becoming more tremendous.

: It’s not deniable that our lives are being improved. But it’s our activities which have been carried out in the attempt to make our lives better that damage the earth in general and our surrounding environment in particular.

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: : Hi all ! : : Highly appreciate your comments for my first essay posted. Is it persuasive, sufficient and logical ?. Which mark may it be given ? Thank you. : : In the last decades, natural disasters happen more often in countries over the world. It’s human activites that cause the earth to be seriously damaged like that. : : The rapid and extensive development in the industiralised countries has discharged with an increasing aniount of pollution. Smoke from factory, dust from construction works, dust from vehicles on the roads make our living enviroment seriously polluted. In some large cities, people have to buy oxygen to breath as there is not enough fresh air for them to breathe. Some people even have to run awy from the urban to live in the country side. The polluted air is alarming us the possibility of damage in our ozon layer, a protection layer from halfmful ultra-violet ray. : : Unlike the case of industrialised countries, people in developing countries is damaging the earth in other ways. Because of low education, people expoilt natural resouces excessively without any activity of creation. In many countries, thousands of hectas of forest have been destroyed for a short period of time. The exploitation of resources has resulted in the ecological imbalance. Natural disaters such as floods, droughts and storms are becoming more tremendous. : : It’s not deniable that our lives are being improved. But it’s our activities which have been carried out in the attempt to make our lives better that damage the earth in general and our surrounding environment in particular.

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