Posted by Lin Lougheed on September 09, 19102 at 18:14:22:
In Reply to: #002: Are parents the best teachers? posted by Yuan on September 09, 19102 at 06:30:36:
You did an excellent job of stating your three points and then giving specific examples. Congratulations.
Your exemplary organization is marred by a few idiomatic mistakes and a few major grammar errors. You should proof your work looking for the grammar errors.
Idiomatic expression
A baby "takes" a first step. Your parallel constructions are interesting, but they don't work in this case.
Major grammar error:
that show a child what does a tree look like, what does a flower smell and what does warmth fell.
show a child what a tree looks like, what a flower smells like, what warmth feels like.
By the way, I'm not sure a parent is responsible for those three things, but you can have your opinion.