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Posted by Janny Zhang Wang on February 08, 19103 at 01:22:49:

#6:

With the developing of our society, there are so many important things to change about my hometown to keep up with our age. Above all, I would like to change the situation of education.

First, there was only one small library with a few of books and poor equipment in my hometown. So I will build a large library for my hometown in place of the old, small one. It will have a lot of books, magazines, videos, and so on, that is, very important things that a library needs. It will contain the newest, up-to-date information. It will also own a number of computers. All of these will help people, especially students to look for information that they need and learn a lot conveniently. Besides, it will run all day and all night and have comfortable, quiet, spacious places which is better for students to study during the exam time.

Second, my school had a little schoolyard. There were not enough classrooms to study and good-equipped laboratories to do experiments. For this reason, I will rebuild the schoolyard. The classrooms will be equipped with modern technology to assist the teachers' teaching, which will be a better place for students to study. The laboratories will have new equipment for experiments, it will also have computer systems to help students to deal with the data processing.

There are so many details to describe the changes about my hometown. In a word, I prefer to change the education situation by building a newest, most advanced, most competing, and most interesting education system in my hometown.




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