Posted by Lin Lougheed on October 05, 19101 at 15:44:58:
In Reply to: “Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.” posted by Marcelo on October 04, 19101 at 22:29:59:
Marcello, You produced a very readable essay. There were a few errors, but the ideas were clear.
You might add one line to the end of the first paragraph to tell us what are the many things that make a successful person: being loved, having fame, and having prestige. Your following paragraphs add details to these three things.
A few comments:
“Being in the right place and in the right moment”
The expression is:
"“Being in the right place at the right time."
Else I would buy
"Or I would buy..."
" I feel that anyway you have much money, if you don’t have healthy, family..."
try:
"I feel that even if you have a lot of money, if you don’t have health, a family..."