Posted by patcharanee.u on May 29, 19102 at 21:43:08:
In Reply to: Hope you did well! posted by Michele Peters on May 25, 19102 at 15:13:03:
: Hope you did well on the test. Some comments:
: : : As people living in a city increases, most of the children are grown up in the city.
: children grow up
: educations in the cities are better, so
: education
: some people even move out from the countries
: the country
: However, growing up in a country let c
: in the country
: nature, without having better educations as what people believe the cities can offer.
: this sentence makes it sound like you think education in the city is better than education in the country; perhaps restate "Although some people believe the city offers a better education, I believe children who grow up freely..."
: I agree that it is better for children to grow up in a countryside.
: You should provide the three reasons for your belief and that you will talk about in your essay.