Posted by Michele Peters on May 25, 19102 at 15:13:03:
In Reply to: comment posted by patcharanee.u on May 20, 19102 at 23:31:31:
Hope you did well on the test. Some comments:
: : As people living in a city increases, most of the children are grown up in the city.
children grow up
educations in the cities are better, so
education
some people even move out from the countries
the country
However, growing up in a country let c
in the country
nature, without having better educations as what people believe the cities can offer.
this sentence makes it sound like you think education in the city is better than education in the country; perhaps restate "Although some people believe the city offers a better education, I believe children who grow up freely..."
I agree that it is better for children to grow up in a countryside.
You should provide the three reasons for your belief and that you will talk about in your essay.