Posted by patcharanee.u on May 31, 19102 at 00:21:51:
In Reply to: Great job posted by Michele Peters on May 25, 19102 at 16:10:29:
: Your essay is well structured and well thought out. You give good support for your reasons and have a good command of English.
: Some suggestions:
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: players graduated from my universities,
: ...my university
: not only baseball fans but only ordinary people know my universities.
: not only...but also...know my university
: impression people have on my
: ...of my...
: was not the exception to use the gym.
: have a party, drinking and singing,
: have a party, and drink and sing
:
: These examples clearly shows
: These examples clearly show
: that spending as much money on students’ sports activities AS on libraries
: advantages such as the increase of universities’ celebrity and the improvement in students’ health as well as relationship.
: the university's increased notarity, improvement of students' health, as well as better relationships among students.
The word "notarity" should be notability,is't it?
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