Posted by Michele Peters on June 02, 19102 at 14:17:24:
In Reply to: Please correct posted by Snow on May 31, 19102 at 16:17:45:
You are off to a good start. Your essay would be stronger if you had a third reason or example to support your view. Separating each paragraph by a space and indent will help the reader to follow. Also, remember to proofread and double check your grammar.
Some suggestions:
:
: In our life,
During our lives
you, you will remember forever. For
remember it forever
example, if you receive a special gift from youR family or friend, you will NEVER forget what happened, because this gift is very precious and meaningful to you.
: Special gift often means family relation or friendship.
For example, if you receive a special from youR friend on your birthday, you will be very happy not only because of gift you receiveD but also because the friendship you have.
Special giftS also have special meaning of it. For example, after many yearS
will receive A gift from you parent.
sunshine, how much night you work for
many nights
The gifts have many to tell.
much to tell
: In general, special giftS always
related to the person who send to you
relate