Posted by Snow on June 04, 19102 at 20:15:57:
In Reply to: Good start posted by Michele Peters on June 02, 19102 at 14:17:24:
: You are off to a good start. Your essay would be stronger if you had a third reason or example to support your view. Separating each paragraph by a space and indent will help the reader to follow. Also, remember to proofread and double check your grammar.
: Some suggestions:
: :
: : In our life,
: During our lives
: you, you will remember forever. For
: remember it forever
:
: example, if you receive a special gift from youR family or friend, you will NEVER forget what happened, because this gift is very precious and meaningful to you.
: : Special gift often means family relation or friendship.
: For example, if you receive a special from youR friend on your birthday, you will be very happy not only because of gift you receiveD but also because the friendship you have.
: Special giftS also have special meaning of it. For example, after many yearS
: will receive A gift from you parent.
: sunshine, how much night you work for
: many nights
:
: The gifts have many to tell.
: much to tell
: : In general, special giftS always
: related to the person who send to you
: relate