Posted by Michele Peters on August 11, 19102 at 11:50:58:
In Reply to: 135 posted by kikita cai on August 09, 19102 at 02:46:00:
Your essay is good. You start with a good introduction, give good examples and end with summary of those examples.
Some other comments:
Because diet effectS our health.
: NowAdays, more and more people are aware of the composition of our daily diet.
: For instance,they avoid eating the food which high in calorie and cholesterin.
...eating foods high in calories and cholestoral.
density. It also helpS you maintain your posture.
For instance, a person who getS cancer, but he never feelS sad and be
Stay with the same person. For example, if you use the third person: a person or he, then use that person throughout. If you use the second person: we, our, or us, then use that person throughout.