Posted by Michele Peters on September 22, 19102 at 13:23:32:
In Reply to: Some people like to work by hand,Other people prefer to use machine.Which posted by Dudu on September 19, 19102 at 04:53:55:
You are on the right track. Be sure to restate your reasons in the last concluding paragraph.
Some suggestions:
But if I am asked to do it by myself,
What is "it"; Replace "it" with "making cookies by hand"
I prefer to use machine as more as possible as other
...a machine...as much as....
afternoon to make some cookies is
afternoon making...
working day, who will choose to make
...who would choose...
Using machine can save us valuable
...machines or a machine
Since we already have a lot of machine which is convenient for modern life,
...have a lot of machines...are convenient
why should we use hand to do those
...our hands....
Maybe quality is important but it really does not worth that much.
Do you mean that maybe quality is important to some people but not to you?
Nowadays, more and more kitchen machines are specially designed for women. And those machines become more and more popular.
Avoid starting a sentence with "And".
...those machines are becoming more and more popular.