Posted by Lin Lougheed on September 08, 19101 at 14:38:26:
In Reply to: If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary? posted by Natasha on September 08, 19101 at 14:06:54:
Yes. I will include this essay in my next edition. Thank you for using it .
You have a very good command of specialized business vocabulary. Your essay reads easily and there are no grammatical errors.
There are a few awkward sentences, but you will fix that when you begin to write English everyday.
Soome suggestions:
end of third paragraph:
"...previous experience into new work. It can be helpful when you need to solve problems or view your organization’s work at a different angle."
"into new tasks" would be more appropriate. The next sentence should begin with "This" to refer back to the previous thought.
In that same sentence, I would change "you" to an "employer" or "one." The subject is too specific (business) to include all readers.